Gary Stu for Bronies, Not Enough Mechs

Is there anything you would change about this book?

The book is well written and well paced, but the pandering to teen boys did me in. I made it to the 9 hour mark and gave up. The lead is an overweight teenage boy who is a literal Brony (in the future apparently people still watch and obsess over My Little Pony.) He grows slightly as a character as the story progresses but is given inordinate praise and rewards from gruff father figures and the attention of a gorgeous and otherwise unattainable woman, as well as the respect of soldiers and significant wealth.

I think if the author had made the character less a caricature of neckbeard culture the story would have landed more successfully for non-neckbeards. Making the protagonist overweight could have made for some great conflict and personal struggles/growth, but the Gary Stu aspects of this book and the uninspired wish fulfillment (wait until the cute, telepathic fairy creature shows up to be a real life Pony friend for the protagonist. I'm not joking, this happens in a story about mechs. Because reasons.) make this a difficult tale to stick with.

What does Craig L. Good bring to the story that you wouldn’t experience if you just read the book?

The narrator was very competent. He did a good job creating distinct voices for each character. It would have been easy to play the main character whinier and more grating, but I'm glad he didn't go that path. If I were reading the book I probably would have assigned a more annoying voice to the protagonist and ultimately disliked him.

Was Cartwright's Cavaliers worth the listening time?

Ultimately yes. I enjoyed the bulk of it but cut out in the last few hours. The limited combat and training segments were entertaining.

Any additional comments?

I won't go any further into the series because of the way the protagonist was developed, and likely won't delve any further into the author's other works. Although setting the initial story in my hometown of Indianapolis was fun.

31 people found this helpful

Don't give up on the book because of the monotone

When you first start listening to this book, you will probably want to stop listening in the first half hour because of the monotone narration; don't. If you persevere, you'll realize that the monotone is the natrator's way of expressing the protagonist's mental state at the start of the story. As the protagonist's life gets progressively more interesting, the narration really comes alive.

The story itself is an entertaining, if somewhat formulaic, example of the current style of military sci-fi, with brief bits of prose that hint at what this author may become. I am looking forward to watching this writer polish their chops as time goes on.

52 people found this helpful

Gary Stu, is that you?

somehow finished this one. Monotone voice acting, cliches left and right. Bronies.

I was thrown off by the many positive reviews, but I think military sci-fi has a pretty low bar for entry for many. A few stompy mechs and a hefty serving of deus ex machina doesn't bother some people, I guess.

9 people found this helpful

Good scifi.

Multiple points of interest. Avoids the miopic scope of so many other scifi audios. There is a whole Galaxy of moving parts here, and they are polished and interesting.

Really ballsy, having a fat protagonist. good dialogue with minor funnies.

The real star is the Mech combat. the caspers are cool. The other mech, the bigger ones, are goosebump inducing.

Their interface has a very warhammer 40k sort of interfacing with a God machine type of goosebumpy vibe.

Anyway, it's good, if you are wondering if it is worth your time, it is. I give it an A. (omg that final battle, good stuff.)

16 people found this helpful

Utter Dissapointment

What could have made this a 4 or 5-star listening experience for you?

This book starts out intresting enough, sci fi fiction in an alien heavy setting where humans are a marginal faction. Intersting politics and everything sounds like it will be a decent read. Then as soon as the action starts, the story fails. The bad guys are all incompitent bumbling idiots that remind me of the droids in phantom menace. The main protagonist is a horrid neckbeard brony gary sue, who goes from childishly comical incompetence and stupidity to saving the day and surviving stuff that should kill him outright time and time again. I managed to get about 7 hours into the book, but sorry when mystical cute furry pets show up that instantly bond with the main character I'm out.

What do you think your next listen will be?

Not sure, but I wont ever again read anything after this author.

Which character – as performed by Craig L. Good – was your favorite?

The performer was decent enough, given what he had to work with. I can't really say I enjoyed any of the characters that much because frankly they were all flat comically stereotypical archtypes. I honestly thought this was a book by a 15-16 year old after listening for a few hours, and was certain it was a the authors first book.. I was wrong in both cases.

If you could play editor, what scene or scenes would you have cut from Cartwright's Cavaliers?

Drop all the brony stuff its uninteresting, does nothing for the character, is utterly out of place 100 years into the future. For the love of god cut the cute pet character, its a horrible trope with nothing to gain from it. The world and setting was fine, just write that. Also tone down the Gary Sue level from 11 to about 3. Sure I can buy the fat kid that inherits an mercenary company in ruins from his father, but the fight with the tank should have turned him into jelly, ramming into stuff even inside armor still hurts. The amount of beating he main character took in that scene alone should have left him crippled for life. The tank scene really lost my interest and I was highly sceptical after that, the moment the thing in the cave showed up I said thats it.

Any additional comments?

Don't let the description fool you, its not a military sci fi book. Its at best a young adult brony gary sue powerfantasy.

16 people found this helpful

For teens

It has promise - just seems written for teen boys.
Unfortunately the performance is a bit missing excitement

2 people found this helpful

GOOD GOD!!!!

Have you ever listened to an audio book in one go. With the richest story line you have ever heard. Well I certainly have not, that is until today. Now im just going to be sitting here waiting for the next one. Wondering how to move on with my life.

14 people found this helpful

loved this voice actor!

The narration was very easy to listen to and well paced. I really enjoyed the voice work for Splunk.
I'm hoping that this fellow does the rest of the books.

1 person found this helpful

very interesting

good book, lots of interesting and funny perspectives. interesting plot that really gets out at the end. really good character development.

1 person found this helpful

Fantastic read/ listen

Great concept and a great book, be warned by the first chapter as it is monotone to the max. I didn't know what the book was about and never heard of it beforehand, glad I took the risk.

1 person found this helpful